Subject: Re: [Dots] FW: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04.txt

From: "Teague, Nik" <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 27 Mar 2017 15:27:54 +0000

Daniel hi,

Thanks for getting this out and all your co-ordination and work!

Some initial amendments:

Section 3.1.2

Title - Remove "on".

old:
'3.1.2.  Enterprise with on Cloud DDoS mitigation provider'

suggest new:
'3.1.2.  Enterprise with Cloud DDoS mitigation provider'

Paragraph 3 - Redundent text - remove and consolidate.

old:
'The communication to trigger, manage, and finalize a DDoS mitigation
   between the enterprise and the Cloud provider is performed using
   DOTS.  The enterprise implements a DOTS client while the Cloud
   Provider implements a DOTS server.

   The enterprise detection and classification systems encompass a DOTS
   client and the cloud provider a DOTS server.'

suggest new:
 'The communication to trigger, manage, and finalize a DDoS mitigation
   between the enterprise and the Cloud provider is performed using
   DOTS.  The enterprise detection, classification and possibly mitigation  
   systems encompass a DOTS client and the cloud provider a DOTS server.'

Paragraph 7 - confusing text on last line.

old:
'the enterprise may then manage the life-cycle of the
   attack on behalf of the enterprise.'

suggest new:
'the enterprise may then manage the life-cycle of the
   attack on behalf of the customer.'

Thanks again,

-Nik

On 27/03/2017, 09:28, "Dots on behalf of Daniel Migault" <[email-masked] on behalf of [email-masked]> wrote:

    Hi, 
    
    Please find the version 04 of the use cases we will discuss during lunch. 
    
    Yours,
    Daniel
    
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    Subject: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04.txt

    A new version of I-D, draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04.txt has been successfully submitted by Daniel Migault and posted to the IETF repository.
    
    Name:		draft-ietf-dots-use-cases
    Revision:	04
    Title:		Use cases for DDoS Open Threat Signaling
    Document date:	2017-03-27
    Group:		dots
    Pages:		12
    URL:            https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04.txt
    Status:         https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dots-use-cases/
    Htmlized:       https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04
    Htmlized:       https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04
    Diff:           https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-04
    
    Abstract:
       The DDoS Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) effort is intended to provide a
       protocol that facilitates interoperability between multivendor
       solutions/services.  This document presents use cases to evaluate the
       interactions expected between the DOTS components as well as the DOTS
       exchanges.  The purpose of the use cases is to identify the
       interacting DOTS component, how they collaborate and what are the
       types of information to be exchanged.

    
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