Subject: Re: [drinks] WGLC Announcement: draft-ietf-drinks-spprov-over-soap

From: "Maharishi, Manjul" <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 10 Jun 2011 09:38:01 -0400

Hi All,

Here are some comments on my review of this I-D. Overall, it looks to be very well put together - precise and succinct.

1.       Section 1: Introduction: The opening para states that "SPPP is best supported by ....". It might be helpful to state the rationale why these "features" are necessary for SPPP. However, this is more of a nit than a necessity - as the expectation is that whoever is reading this document is familiar with SPPP and its needs.

2.       Section 3:, 3rd para: "Document Literal Wrapped style...<snip...<snip>...is generally regarded as an optimal approach that....". It will be good to provide some reference(s) that support this. Not sure if it is acceptable practice to have any non-standard bodies URLs be listed in the reference section (other standards organizations documents are ok - such as ITU-T etc).

3.       Section 3, page 6 - last sentence: SOAP and WSDL are referenced, but not present in the Reference section.

4.       Section 4, page 7 - last sentence: HTTP is reference, but not present in the Reference section.

5.       (nit) Section 7.1 - last sentence of first para: Typo - "Thes" should be "These".

6.       (nit) Section 7.2 - last sentence of second para: Typo - "reasonabl" should be "reasonable".

IMO, It is good to go with these changes.

Manjul

From: [email-masked] [mailto:[email-masked]] On Behalf Of Sumanth Channabasappa
Sent: Thursday, May 19, 2011 3:58 PM
To: [email-masked]
Subject: [drinks] WGLC Announcement: draft-ietf-drinks-spprov-over-soap

WG Participants,

This email is to announce the Working Group Last Call(WGLC) for comments on:
http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-drinks-sppp-over-soap-03

Title                                                     : SPPP Over SOAP and HTTP
Intended status of the document     : Standards Track

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Please review the document, and send comments to this mailing list.

The WGLC for this document will last for three weeks, so please send your comments before: 9 June, 2011, 23:59 UTC.

For an overview about the draft's history, please see:
http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-drinks-sppp-over-soap-03

For the most recent changes, please see the slide deck from the authors (as presented at Prague):
http://www.ietf.org/proceedings/80/slides/drinks-1.pdf

You may also want to see the associated notes:
http://www.ietf.org/proceedings/80/minutes/drinks.txt

;and the changes to rev -03 at:
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/drinks/current/msg00912.html

Historical changes to this draft, and the reason for the changes, can be obtained from mailing list discussions at:
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/drinks/current/maillist.html

Regards,
Sumanth [As WG chair]

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