From owner-if-mib@padauk.vnd.tek.com Fri Mar 10 12:15:29 2000 Received: from fw1.tek.com (fw1.tek.com [192.65.17.16]) by ietf.org (8.9.1a/8.9.1a) with ESMTP id MAA25796 for ; Fri, 10 Mar 2000 12:15:26 -0500 (EST) Received: from fw1.tek.com (root@localhost) by fw1.tek.com with ESMTP id JAA00954 for ; Fri, 10 Mar 2000 09:14:57 -0800 (PST) Received: from padauk.vnd.tek.com (padauk.vnd.tek.com [128.181.192.78]) by fw1.tek.com with ESMTP id JAA00947 for ; Fri, 10 Mar 2000 09:14:56 -0800 (PST) Received: (from majordomo@localhost) by padauk.vnd.tek.com (8.7.5/8.7.3) id JAA29640 for if-mib-outgoing; Fri, 10 Mar 2000 09:11:40 -0800 (PST) X-Authentication-Warning: padauk.vnd.tek.com: majordomo set sender to owner-if-mib@domo.vnd.tek.com using -f From: Keith McCloghrie Message-Id: <200003101705.JAA01063@foxhound.cisco.com> Subject: Re: nits in To: schoenw@ibr.cs.tu-bs.de (Juergen Schoenwaelder) Date: Fri, 10 Mar 2000 09:05:41 -0800 (PST) Cc: kzm@cisco.com, kasten@argon.com, if-mib@vnd.tek.com In-Reply-To: <200003101325.OAA11073@henkell.ibr.cs.tu-bs.de> from "Juergen Schoenwaelder" at Mar 10, 2000 02:25:21 PM X-Mailer: ELM [version 2.5 PL1] MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Sender: owner-if-mib@vnd.tek.com Precedence: bulk Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Thanks for your careful reading. I'll fix them all. Keith. > I just found some nits in : > > 1. The third and fourth paragraph on page 10 talk about compliance > statements. They refer to SNMPv1 and SNMPv2 where they should > refer to SMIv1 and SMIv2. > > 2. The third paragraph on page 12 contains the phrase "SNMP's GetNext > (and SNMPv2's GetBulk) operation". You may want to change that to > just "SNMP's GetNext (and GetBulk) operation" (perhaps even > removing the braces). > > 3. Item (2) on page 16 says that "64-bit counters are a new feature, > introduced in SNMPv2." I suggest to replace SNMPv2 with SMIv2. > > 4. First paragraph in section 3.1.18 refers to "noSuchInstance for > SNMPv2". You may want to change that to "(e.g., noSuchInstance for > SNMPv3)" or "(e.g., noSuchInstance for the second version of SNMP > protocol operations)" or just "(e.g., noSuchName or noSuchInstance)". > > Thats it. > > /js > > -- > Juergen Schoenwaelder Technical University Braunschweig > Dept. Operating Systems & Computer Networks > Phone: +49 531 391 3289 Bueltenweg 74/75, 38106 Braunschweig, Germany > Fax: +49 531 391 5936 > > > >