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A Review. Thanks Madjid.


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Date: Thu, May 29, 2008 at 5:24 PM
Subject: RE: [Mobopts] RG Last Call for Media-independent
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To: Rajeev Koodli <rajeev.koodli@gmail.com>
Cc: Nakhjiri Madjid-VXT746 <madjid.nakhjiri@motorola.com>

...........................

 I unfortunately think the doc has too much background material and
abstraction that takes the user through a lot of text (15 pages)
before it introduces any of its framework concepts and that makes
reviewing very tough if you are time constraint, sorry

I think one of the strong points that any doc about Pre-auth needs to
make is that many of the procedures such as handover keying and
reauthentication deal with cases where there is a single source of
trust at the top and all underlying AAA domains trust that top source
of trust and any keys it generates and distributes. In cases of
multiple operators without roaming relationship, or without agreement
to participate in a key management scheme, you do have to perform a
pre-auth function to establish the security mechanisms without
assuming a common source of trust.



the first paragraph of the intro can be toned down a bit with respect
to ordering of the challenges.

Is this expects to solve the seamless mobility problem even when there
is a single L2 interface? (intro) As much as this being a noble goal,
I think with the advances in Silicon and wireless devices, this is
overcomplication of the requirements. I do agree that the
multi-interface assumption has been one of the barriers for 802.21
though. I am wondering how a mobile performs pre-auth with an
authentication agent of a new access technology, while still connected
to the old one if it is single interface, also not clear how the
mobile acquires the IP address of this agent, as section 6.3 states if
it is not tuned to the new technology, sorry if I have not gone to end
of the document and not being far.
Third, a mobility
   optimization mechanism needs to support not only multi-interface
   terminals where multiple simultaneous connectivity through multiple
   interfaces can be expected, but also single-interface terminals.
section 1.1.
I am not sure if the document needs to go into a serial analysis of
every source of delay in the system. Since this is about pre-auth and
IP address acquisition, etc, it could simply just talk about those
things. so section 1.1 can undergo a serious diet.
A QoS style description of delay would not be needed either, IMO. On
the other hand, what that section really is missing is a description
of issues around reestablishing link security (authentication, link
key management, access authorization) in conjunction to network access
and handovers (inter or intra domain), because that is really the
focus of a pre-auth framework.

section 2
This type of Inter-technology handover is often
   called as Vertical Handover since the mobile makes movement between
   two different cell sizes.
I don't think Vertical handover is defined based on cell size, it is
defined based on the type of access technology (as listed).

I think an important point about Inter-domain, is not just where the
mobile is authenticated, but also where his user profile, credentials
are stored and where his payment is associated to. Because that will
define the difference between home and visited domains from the
security standpoint, the mobile has an initial and permanent trust
relationship with its home and any interaction with a visited domain
is based on a temporary and transitive trust established based on a
mobile-home trust and a home-visited domain roaming relationship.

I know it is a sticky subject, but probably AA (authentication agent)
needs to provide some IETF or other wireless examples (EAP
authenticator, ASN GW, etc) and also how the Authentication signaling
is to traverse over the new network if there is only one interface.

The parts with pre-configuration are ok from 802.21 perspective,
however I don't think this doc or framework should get into decisions
of which network to use is a network discover issue that assumes a
general broadcasting broker (I think 802.21 calls it information
server).
 Decision regarding which
   candidate network the mobile needs to pre-authenticate with will
   depend upon several policies, such as signaling overhead, bandwidth
   requirement (QoS), mobile's location, communication cost, and
   handover robustness etc.
This just makes the framework for this protocol too large, and
academic, specially if things like specific server (that nobody would
take ownership of in a inter-domain scenario) come in.

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Hi,

my high-level comment is that the document captures many things. While
this is a good thing in one way, it diminishes the focus as a bye
product, unfortunately. So, I am suggesting that it should be
streamlined to make it crisp to better retain its focus on pre-auth
related issues, framework and procedures for inter-domain handovers.

More comments below:

Regards,

-Rajeev


The paragraph starting with "An end-to-end delay consists of several.."
is too dense and long. I am not sure if all of the text is needed.
Please consider making this brief, and keep only the parts which are
essential. In general, detailed descriptions of the previous work should
be referenced out, and not be repeated here.

"This type of Inter-technology handover is often
   called as Vertical Handover since the mobile makes movement between
   two different cell sizes."
                      ^^^^^^^^^^ ??
Section 2 is titled "Inter-domain handover", but it includes the
definitions for different types of handovers. Perhaps revise the section
heading to something like "Handover Types". Also, please provide more
succinct definitions. You may move details which may be useful (but not
crucial) to an Appendix.
(I am trying to see if we can make the presentation little more
crisper).

Section 3 provides a good survey. You may want to revise the title to
"Related Work"

Section 4 - Applicability should be no more than two paragraphs I think

Shouldn't the Terminology Section be earlier, say right after
Introduction?

 Section 6.1:
"MPA provides four basic procedures to provide this functionality.
   The first procedure is referred to as "pre-authentication", the
   second procedure is referred to as "pre-configuration", the
   combination of the third and fourth procedures are referred to as
   "secure proactive handover"."

Either state 4 procedures or 3 procedures.

Section 6.1, paragraph 3 is important for people to get a high-level
overview. It is too condensed. Please try to make the steps clear. And,
do no use acronyms (such as MMP) that are not defined earlier.

PHT (Proactive Handover Tunnel) -> Proactive Handover Tunnel (PHT)

Section 6.2:

"..securely executing a configuration protocol to
   securely deliver an IP address .."

too many 'securely'

"An access router is a router that is responsible for the other part
   of pre-configuration, i.e., securely executing a tunnel management
   protocol to establish a proactive handover tunnel to the mobile node.
   The signaling messages of the configuration protocol MUST be
   protected using a key derived from the key corresponding to the
   MPA-SA."

May be I missed it.. How does the AR get the corresponding keys? You
describe it later, but please make a reference

Section 6.3:

Step 2: "It then performs pre-configuration,
   with the configuration agent using the configuration protocol to
   obtain an IP address, say nCoA (new care-of address), and other
   configuration parameters from the CTN, and with the access router
   using the tunnel management protocol to establish a proactive
   handover tunnel.  "

There are two distinct steps here: pre-configuration, tunnel set up.
You should not combine them into a single sentence (this applies as a
general rule). Also, specify what "other configuration parameters"
mean; it should be clear.

Step 4:
"The mobile may execute the tunnel
   management protocol to delete or disable the proactive handover
   tunnel and cache nCoA after deletion or disabling of the tunnel. "

 Do you allow tunnel deletion prior to link switching? If so, what does
the AR do for packets arriving for nCoA, once tunnel interface is
deleted? "Caching" an address does not sound right.

 "An example call flow for MPA is shown in Figure 3 and Figure 4."

Why is this an example call flow? This is _the_ call flow right?

Section 7:

Please focus on the parts essential to the MPA, and move rest of the
description to the Appendix.

Section 7.3.5. is perhaps not crucial, and can be moved to the appendix

Section 7.4 is not necessary I think. You have created a tunnel
interface between the MN and AR. There are references on how to ue ND
over tunnel interfaces. You can also disable it.

Sections 7.6 and 7.9 are related, and should be condensed into one
section I think.

Section 7.8 does not belong to the main body of the document

Section 8 on Deployment Issues: IMHO, this may be a little early for the
framework. I would consider a separate document once enough experience
is obtained. If there are parts you consider worth documenting now,
please move them to the Appendix.

Section 9 is important since it is supposed to capture the Inter-domain
Handover, which is the primary focus of this ID.
I would consider the key issues that come up, and move multicast
mobility out, or considerably condense it.

In sum, please revise the ID keeping the essential parts in the main
body, referencing known work (without too much description) and moving
the adjoining and descriptive material you consider necessary to
appendix.


General presentation:

please revise phrases such as "A mobile may like to.." to "A mobile may
wish to.." And, please avoid sentences such as "..should not be a big
problem".

"Third, a mobility optimization mechanism needs to support not only
multi-interface terminals where multiple simultaneous connectivity
through multiple interfaces can be expected, but also single-interface
terminals."

RKo> I assume you mean single interface connectivity right? Even with
multiple interfaces, you could still have a single interface
connectivity.

"References [RFC2679], [RFC2680] and 2681 [RFC2681] describe some of the
measurement techniques for delay and
   jitter."

RKo> "Measurement techniques for delay and jitter are described in [],
[].."


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Rajeev, Madjid,
                 Thanks for your review and comments on the MPA draft. 
We will submit a revised version addressing your comments and suggestions.

Regards
Ashutosh

Koodli, Rajeev wrote:
> 	 
> Hi,
> 
> my high-level comment is that the document captures many things. While
> this is a good thing in one way, it diminishes the focus as a bye
> product, unfortunately. So, I am suggesting that it should be
> streamlined to make it crisp to better retain its focus on pre-auth
> related issues, framework and procedures for inter-domain handovers.
> 
> More comments below:
> 
> Regards,
> 
> -Rajeev
> 
> 
> The paragraph starting with "An end-to-end delay consists of several.."
> is too dense and long. I am not sure if all of the text is needed.
> Please consider making this brief, and keep only the parts which are
> essential. In general, detailed descriptions of the previous work should
> be referenced out, and not be repeated here.
> 
> "This type of Inter-technology handover is often
>    called as Vertical Handover since the mobile makes movement between
>    two different cell sizes."
>                       ^^^^^^^^^^ ??
> Section 2 is titled "Inter-domain handover", but it includes the
> definitions for different types of handovers. Perhaps revise the section
> heading to something like "Handover Types". Also, please provide more
> succinct definitions. You may move details which may be useful (but not
> crucial) to an Appendix.
> (I am trying to see if we can make the presentation little more
> crisper).
> 
> Section 3 provides a good survey. You may want to revise the title to
> "Related Work"
> 
> Section 4 - Applicability should be no more than two paragraphs I think
> 
> Shouldn't the Terminology Section be earlier, say right after
> Introduction?
> 
>  Section 6.1:
> "MPA provides four basic procedures to provide this functionality.
>    The first procedure is referred to as "pre-authentication", the
>    second procedure is referred to as "pre-configuration", the
>    combination of the third and fourth procedures are referred to as
>    "secure proactive handover"."
> 
> Either state 4 procedures or 3 procedures.
> 
> Section 6.1, paragraph 3 is important for people to get a high-level
> overview. It is too condensed. Please try to make the steps clear. And,
> do no use acronyms (such as MMP) that are not defined earlier.
> 
> PHT (Proactive Handover Tunnel) -> Proactive Handover Tunnel (PHT)
> 
> Section 6.2:
> 
> "..securely executing a configuration protocol to
>    securely deliver an IP address .."
> 
> too many 'securely'
> 
> "An access router is a router that is responsible for the other part
>    of pre-configuration, i.e., securely executing a tunnel management
>    protocol to establish a proactive handover tunnel to the mobile node.
>    The signaling messages of the configuration protocol MUST be
>    protected using a key derived from the key corresponding to the
>    MPA-SA."
> 
> May be I missed it.. How does the AR get the corresponding keys? You
> describe it later, but please make a reference
> 
> Section 6.3:
> 
> Step 2: "It then performs pre-configuration,
>    with the configuration agent using the configuration protocol to
>    obtain an IP address, say nCoA (new care-of address), and other
>    configuration parameters from the CTN, and with the access router
>    using the tunnel management protocol to establish a proactive
>    handover tunnel.  "
> 
> There are two distinct steps here: pre-configuration, tunnel set up.
> You should not combine them into a single sentence (this applies as a
> general rule). Also, specify what "other configuration parameters"
> mean; it should be clear.
> 
> Step 4:
> "The mobile may execute the tunnel
>    management protocol to delete or disable the proactive handover
>    tunnel and cache nCoA after deletion or disabling of the tunnel. "
> 
>  Do you allow tunnel deletion prior to link switching? If so, what does
> the AR do for packets arriving for nCoA, once tunnel interface is
> deleted? "Caching" an address does not sound right.
> 
>  "An example call flow for MPA is shown in Figure 3 and Figure 4."
> 
> Why is this an example call flow? This is _the_ call flow right?
> 
> Section 7:
> 
> Please focus on the parts essential to the MPA, and move rest of the
> description to the Appendix.
> 
> Section 7.3.5. is perhaps not crucial, and can be moved to the appendix
> 
> Section 7.4 is not necessary I think. You have created a tunnel
> interface between the MN and AR. There are references on how to ue ND
> over tunnel interfaces. You can also disable it.
> 
> Sections 7.6 and 7.9 are related, and should be condensed into one
> section I think.
> 
> Section 7.8 does not belong to the main body of the document
> 
> Section 8 on Deployment Issues: IMHO, this may be a little early for the
> framework. I would consider a separate document once enough experience
> is obtained. If there are parts you consider worth documenting now,
> please move them to the Appendix.
> 
> Section 9 is important since it is supposed to capture the Inter-domain
> Handover, which is the primary focus of this ID.
> I would consider the key issues that come up, and move multicast
> mobility out, or considerably condense it.
> 
> In sum, please revise the ID keeping the essential parts in the main
> body, referencing known work (without too much description) and moving
> the adjoining and descriptive material you consider necessary to
> appendix.
> 
> 
> General presentation:
> 
> please revise phrases such as "A mobile may like to.." to "A mobile may
> wish to.." And, please avoid sentences such as "..should not be a big
> problem".
> 
> "Third, a mobility optimization mechanism needs to support not only
> multi-interface terminals where multiple simultaneous connectivity
> through multiple interfaces can be expected, but also single-interface
> terminals."
> 
> RKo> I assume you mean single interface connectivity right? Even with
> multiple interfaces, you could still have a single interface
> connectivity.
> 
> "References [RFC2679], [RFC2680] and 2681 [RFC2681] describe some of the
> measurement techniques for delay and
>    jitter."
> 
> RKo> "Measurement techniques for delay and jitter are described in [],
> [].."
> 
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I don't know if you have already seen it, but I missed this
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A new Request for Comments is now available in online RFC libraries.
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http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/ietf-announce/current/msg04864.html

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