Subject: [netext] draft-ietf-netext-ani-location-01 comments

From: "Kent Leung (kleung)" <[email-masked]>
Date: Thu, 24 Jul 2014 18:48:15 +0000

Hi Rajesh et al. A few comments on this draft.

1.      Abstract section: "Geo-location" -> "geolocation"?

2.      "operator-identifier" -> "operator identifier"

3.      "Civic Location" -> "civic location"

4.      "MAG Group Identifier -> "MAG group identifier"?

5.      Introduction: "ANI mobility Option" -> "ANI mobility option"

6.      "may contain SSID and BSSID of the Access Point (AP)" (remove comma)

7.      "Geo-Location of the AP" -> "geolocation of the AP"

8.      "Operator-Identifier" -> "operator identifier"?

9.      "Geo-spatial" -> "geospatial"?

10.    "The group-identifier is used a proxy for coarse location" -> "The group identifier is used as proxy for coarse location"

11.    "group-identifier" -> "group identifier" (global change)

12.    General comment on consistency for words: geolocation, civic location, AP group identifier, etc.

13.    Sect. 3.1: How is the XML encoding represented?

14.    "as identifier by an operator-identifier" -> "as identifier by an operator"

15.    Reserved field description is missing (e.g. MUST be set to zero when sending and ignored when received.)

16.    Sect. 3.2: "2 octet integer" -> "2 octet unsigned integer"?

17.    "left to implementation. )" (extra space before parenthesis)

18.    Sect. 3.3: Extra reserved field description

19.    "It indicates the time in seconds before the MAG sends an update value of ANI mobility options assuming ANI value changed"?

Kent